So welcome to the unit on editing, we're going to use one joke for this that I have we we came up with together from the 711 routine. It's awesome that we have the technology to have slurpees. Imagine how much better we have it than literally everyone in the past. That's the setup. And we've got our 10 punch lines. And we're going to go through and try to figure out which one is the best and then cut this down.

This ultimately is going to become a very particular kind of joke. Let's go ahead and zoom in a little bit. It's going to become a very particular kind of joke. And right now it's it's a lot you can see this is a ton. But let's start with the setup itself. Before we even jump into it.

What do we want? It's awesome that we have the technology to have slurpees imagine how much better we have it than literally everyone in the past. What can we cut out of this? I think just to start out with we could say it's amazing that the technology to have slurpees exists Just cuts down some of those words right away. We have it so much better than literally everyone in the past. It's pretty short.

It's cut down a few syllables from here, but it's a little crisper, I would encourage you to do this with your setups. So let's go through it. You can read each of these individually. We'll take a little bit but we'll try to figure out which one we like. How many words are were flop because people didn't, couldn't drink cold stuff. How many slurpees could have saved people's lives not really punch line, it was my first attempt at going somewhere.

I could write something further about that, that drinking something cold would have stopped so many different historical events. I think I just think it moved on to number two here with that the police in Selma had just given slavery, the civil rights movement would have been over in a few weeks. I don't know if that's that funny. Maybe we'll come back to it. Imagine what the slurpees of the future will have will be amazing uranium flavored moons slurpees zero G slurpees. Using a Slurpee, you could go weightless actually like this, but I don't think it's good for this joke.

Let's move on and toss that down here by itself. And what we might do is write a second joke about that afterwards, but right now, we're just going to go ahead and leave that. In fact, I'll cut it. Maybe scientists will divide history into pre and post Slurpee time reckoning bc ad BC, etc. Pre Slurpee and post slavery, maybe the Slurpee will come to be understood as history's greatest invention, the USSR fell after the Slurpee. This is kind of a funny idea.

I don't really know if it lines up with this setup, though. That's part of the issue. It's good that I created this I actually think I'm gonna keep this one to the side also. So we're gonna go ahead and put that down here. This could be a joke of its own or it could be a tag, which could go on to a joke later. And just to be clear, a tag is a punch line that happens after a punch line you the punch and a couple other little things afterwards that keep the humor Going, so maybe that could be something, but I didn't think it was good enough to stand on its own.

So DARPA was invented in 1982. And nothing interesting has happened since noon in 1969. Last moon mission was the year the slipper was invented. No Mars mission, the Slurpee was the culmination of history. And that actually is pretty funny, I think. I think that's pretty funny.

But again, it doesn't feel like it's a continuation of this setup necessarily. It's another good one. In fact, I think I might break that off, and pop it over here, because it seems like it's a pretty good joke that runs along with these two. So we're just going to go ahead and get rid of that one. Also, animals can have slurpees eventually, philosophers will call that animal cruelty. Not really sure that's a joke.

Let's go ahead and get rid of that one. Not having a Slurpee is the biggest problem in the apocalypse. The first bullets that'll be fired after society claps will be for slurpees. World War Three will be over slurpees. Yeah, it's kind of a lot. A lot moving around there.

I don't think that's a great joke, either. Un should have an open slippery drink by everyone. And every country should have their own local flavor. I think that's a pretty good joke. I used that in the punch line video. Let's move forward.

Let's hang on to that for a second people have imagined celebrities from all of history. cave paintings, Lascaux caves in France only in 1982. Could they be deciphered but we can't make them because they require Saber Tooth tigers and they're extinct. Leonardo da Vinci had drawings for beans and notebooks, but he died. This is pretty good. It is a logical continuation of this setup.

Actually, it's one of the first ones that I wrote with the exception of maybe this one. That actually is a logical continuation of that setup, I could alter the setup. You can always do that you can always return to the setup and alter it to fit the punch line you want. Actually a lot of comedians do that. Dave Chappelle is famous for creating punch lines first and then looking for setups to complete them. It's like a puzzle game.

But that's not the point of this exercise necessarily. All of this modern bullshit is worth it, taxes Trump Social media other bs global warming, it's all worth it to get a brain freeze. That could be cool, but then I would have to talk about, I guess why slurpees are so great. I'd have to build up a lot of it seems like a lot of work to do in this joke. It doesn't fulfill the setup. Again, I could break that off and do its own joke.

I think this one people have imagined celebrities from all history. That's pretty funny. The idea that the Lascaux caves in France, and we could only decipher them in 1982 because it had been invented Leonardo da Vinci having drawings of a Slurpee in his book, we can just immediately thinking a couple of different ones Egyptian depictions of mummies or have Pharaohs. mommies don't drink slurpees mummies are dead. With slurpees. We could maybe say even something like Roman emperors, having slaves crush up ice, but hadn't invented corn hadn't discovered corn.

Pardon me. So no corn syrup. So what you want to look for is, when you're editing is it options to continue to develop. So that's what this is. I just found this. This is a good joke in itself, I had that one written earlier.

These are pretty good. I like nobody who marched to Selma had a Slurpee, that's kind of funny, but honestly, this one, I think, makes the most sense for this joke. So I'm gonna go ahead and get rid of all of this. And that's going to be the joke. Now, this is actually the joke. So what I'm going to do is pop that out.

And just go ahead and write this out completely. So we'll go ahead and write this language out completely by itself. This is how I edit and put things together. So that's the entire joke. Let's forget these for a second. I think they're pretty good.

We might go ahead and build those out in the next couple of videos. But for right now, let's look at I don't know if these are actually spelled usko but there's caves in France. cave paintings. It's always good to be specific in comedy. This is a good time to learn this lesson. You want to be specific, I could say cave paintings and just left it at that.

But the lowest scope caves in France are a specific reference. It's very interesting. For some reason, specificity causes people to to latch on it makes a very clear mental image. cave paintings is general Lascaux caves in France is specific and yours are specific. I could have said only after the slavery was invented, could it be deciphered, but only in 1982. And then I could add on after the Slurpee was invented could be deciphered so now we know we're trying to build that mental picture.

So now that we have let's let's try to go through and continue to edit it. We have it so much better than live literally everyone in the past. People have imagined slurpees from all of history. cave paintings, let's go caves in France. So I could just say The Lascaux cave paintings in France could only be deciphered in 1982 after the Slurpee was invented, but we can't make them but we can't use them. They actually have recipes for slurpees but we can't make them because they require saber toothed tigers.

And they're extinct. Doesn't sound like a delicious Slurpee. So that's a full joke. And it started without having necessarily the full joke completely there. So this Leonardo da Vinci his drawings are Sabrina's notebooks but he died but he's dead. Yeah.

I don't know why that follows. That's kind of funny this I might try that out on stage actually, but he died is kind of a funny punch to this setup because I don't say anything about it. It's almost a non sequitur which is a type of joke in which the punch line that follows has nothing to do with the setup that began at Egyptians depictions of Pharaohs with slurpees. There are once again, I can't type Egyptian depictions of Pharaohs with slurpees. What can we say about them? There are Egyptian depictions of Pharaohs with slurpees.

They're mummified remains. lightning bolts show the evidence of brain Freeze. Roman emperors having slaves to crush up ice and emperors had had slaves crush up ice. But there was but every flavor of Slurpee was disgusting because nobody in the old world had corn syrup. Corn syrup is specific that's funny because that's what slippers are made out of. So now you can see here I've built this out and I've kind of additionally added some components to it that add context to the writing.

It sort of flows better now let's go let's go cave paintings and France can only be described 92 after the Slurpee was invented. We could say something before that. We just thought it was you know, cops of coke or something? I don't know. There's a ridiculous But I don't think I'd add that in there actually have recipes for slurpees but we can't make them because they require saber toothed tigers and they're extinct. Doesn't sound like a delicious Slurpee.

Let's get rid of that because it we have this punch line later. Bang. Leonardo da Vinci actually had had a drawing of a Slurpee in his notebooks but he died. Yeah, not that funny. Let's go ahead and cut it out. Also, strange different time period.

There are Egyptian just depictions of Pharaohs with slurpees mummified remains lightning bolts to show the evidence of brain freeze. That's its own punch line. Roman emperors it's nice to crush up ice but every flavor slippery was disgusting. Because nobody in the world in the old world had corn syrup. So it's actually a full This is a full joke. It's the rule of threes are in here.

Let's go cave paintings. Egyptian depictions Roman emperors. Let's go through and see if we can cut down even more people have imagined celebrities from all History people have always imagined slurpees. So we know that's true, because we already talked about it in the past. There's no reason to repeat that again here. It also immediately drives towards this point, let's go cave paintings in France could only be deciphered in 1982 after the Slurpee was invented.

Now that asks the question well, what did people think it was beforehand that might imply that question? I don't know if I want that implied because I just go straight into they actually have recipes for slurpees. I might just cut this out. Bang. Let's go cave paintings in France actually have recipes for slurpees. But nobody could make sense of them.

But we can't make them because they require saber toothed tigers and they're extinct. That's that's decent. Maybe that's funny. Maybe it's not I'll do that on stage I would do it on stage in that form. There are Egyptians this picture of Pharaohs was slurpees mummified remains lightning bolts show the evidence of brain freeze. Only five remains doesn't need to be here.

There are Egyptian depictions hieroglyphics. There we go. Still can't spell hieroglyphics of Pharaohs was slurpees lightning bolts show the evidence lightning bolts pointing to the head show the evidence of brain freeze that's kind of funny now it it clears it up it's very direct hieroglyphics Is this a specific word? Pharaohs was slurpees lightning bolts should pointing the head to show the evidence or brain theories. I might just get rid of that show brain freeze. Everybody knows what a brain freeze is.

And the evidence of are some words that maybe don't need to be there. Roman emperors have slaves crush up ice but every flavor Slavery was disgusting, because the Romans didn't have corn corn syrup. So it clears this up. So what I would do is continue to cut that language down, hopefully you can understand I want to get rid of words and even syllables that don't need to be there. I want to cut out things and cut it down this went from is you could see previously the entire page of all kinds of different jokes and punch lines to this one setup. And then a handful of punch lines and jokes that are really short.

If you can reduce this even more, I would encourage you to do it. I'll have it in the assignment. If you can reduce it more or even parse it out into other jokes like I've done here. That would be completely fine. Also, you can actually get a lot of material from a really crisp and well crafted joke because it implies other things. So that's the basic approach to editing.

You can see it's taken us about 15 minutes to go through this. It's takes a while but once you find out what you want and what you want to do on stage, it's great. This is really only one joke probably take me about a minute maybe to do this on stage, but you do 20 of those and then you've got a 20 minute feature, but so you're going to be doing probably between five and I would say 10 of these probably about eight to fill out your five minute bit.